Uploaded July 2021 | Updated September 2026, 2 weeks ago

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This example uses a sample student's writing that follows the guidance of beginning the paragraph with a topic sentence, supporting that topic sentence with multiple pieces of evidence (i.e., literature), and then concludes with a summary/transition sentence. The difficulty is that the student presents the evidence as one brief annotation, followed by another brief annotation.

This worked example illustrates how to identify the specific points made by using each of those pieces of evidence, and then re-writes the paragraph so that each point is discussed using the evidence.