SpaceGuru5 | Crappypasta Graveyard Ep. 4: Ordinary Men @SpaceGuru5 | Uploaded November 2016 | Updated October 2024, 6 hours ago.
It's been a while since I've made one of these, hasn't it?
Welcome back to another episode of Crappypasta Graveyard, where I exhume the remains of a story deleted from the SOG Wiki and read it for your entertainment.
Today's story is about the lives of two ordinary men who wind up in a gang after saving the boss's daughter, the heir apparent. Just as soon as they get settled, they are thrown in the middle of a gang war with another gang who is after the boss's daughter. However, there is one plot twist that makes this story especially terrific(ally bad). What is this twist? Stay tuned!
My issues with this story:
- The twist, whether or not it's obvious, kinda detracts from the story when you consider what goes on in the story versus what the twist is really about. (I hate to be so cryptic, but I don't wanna spoil anything)
- Although a somewhat gripping story, this is totally removed from what the story's twist is really about.
- Is it normal for homeless people to join gangs? It doesn't really seem to make sense to me.
- Minor flubs in spelling and grammar here and there. It does impede reading a little bit, which does take away from the experience.
So believe it or not, this is actually one of few creepypastas that can be tied back to an author. I won't reveal the author's name here, though. :P
R.I.P. Ordinary Men
(discovered September 7, 2015 - deleted September 10, 2015)
Executioner: Lindenbree
Music:
Gilbert Martinez - "Toccata alternativa prima di messa" (2015)
Johann Jakob Froberger - "Fantasia in E Minor, Mvt. II" (1649)
All episodes here: youtube.com/playlist?list=PLiTJWecSmJzr5vMWI0NBGNz5L__jhwOOP
It's been a while since I've made one of these, hasn't it?
Welcome back to another episode of Crappypasta Graveyard, where I exhume the remains of a story deleted from the SOG Wiki and read it for your entertainment.
Today's story is about the lives of two ordinary men who wind up in a gang after saving the boss's daughter, the heir apparent. Just as soon as they get settled, they are thrown in the middle of a gang war with another gang who is after the boss's daughter. However, there is one plot twist that makes this story especially terrific(ally bad). What is this twist? Stay tuned!
My issues with this story:
- The twist, whether or not it's obvious, kinda detracts from the story when you consider what goes on in the story versus what the twist is really about. (I hate to be so cryptic, but I don't wanna spoil anything)
- Although a somewhat gripping story, this is totally removed from what the story's twist is really about.
- Is it normal for homeless people to join gangs? It doesn't really seem to make sense to me.
- Minor flubs in spelling and grammar here and there. It does impede reading a little bit, which does take away from the experience.
So believe it or not, this is actually one of few creepypastas that can be tied back to an author. I won't reveal the author's name here, though. :P
R.I.P. Ordinary Men
(discovered September 7, 2015 - deleted September 10, 2015)
Executioner: Lindenbree
Music:
Gilbert Martinez - "Toccata alternativa prima di messa" (2015)
Johann Jakob Froberger - "Fantasia in E Minor, Mvt. II" (1649)
All episodes here: youtube.com/playlist?list=PLiTJWecSmJzr5vMWI0NBGNz5L__jhwOOP
